“Was this really the only way?” Cian asked. “Yes, this is the only way” Brandon told Cian. “Why can’t we just call the cops or even better the FBI?” said Cian. “Because they’ll kidnap us” Hector said. There were three fifteen-year-old boys in a museum, about to steal a diamond worth five million dollars. “I don’t like this, I don’t like this at all” Cian said. “Well threat of kidnapping wouldn’t be the best thing that could happen” Hector said. “But what if he will kidnap us anyway?” Cian asked. Hector said, “where will the exchange happen anyway?” “Central Park” Brendan said.
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Ag foghlaim le chéile
Hi Ciarán,
I enjoyed reading your story. Well done.
These boys sure are in a spot of bother.
I wonder who are they?
Are they sons of very rich or powerful people?
I’d love to read more…
Good work this week.
Keep writing in these uncertain times.
Mrs Boyce (Team 100WC)
Cork.
Ireland
https://mrsboycesclass.100wc.net/
Hi Ciarán,
Your opening landed us right in the middle of an exiciting story, a heist and maybe a kidnapping.
Your short sharp sentences in dialogue form added to pressure, desperation and the stress your characters were under, well done for creating that in one hundred words! It was like being late into a film at the cinema and missing the first half hour, so many questions to ask , how, why, who ,where.
Well done and keep up the good work.